Translation help

[Stephen Liu]

Hi,

Please help me to correct following translation if being incorrect.

(Referring to service inside a church)

To maintain a solemn environment without disturbance in the service must stand firm.

Translation:-
Pour maintenir un environnement solennelle sans perturbation dans le service doit rester ferme

Merci

B.R.
Stephen L

[adel]

Hi Stephen
Could you rephrase the sentence in english or did you mean To maintain a solemn environment without disturbance in the service IT must stand firm

[Stephen Liu]

Hi adel,

Actually I used "To maintain a solemn environment without disturbance in the service" as noun/subject

Or better say it;
"maintaining a solemn environment without disturbance in the service" must stand firm without concession.

Thanks

B.R.
SL

[adel]

if so you add IL Pour maintenir un environnement solennelle sans perturbation dans le service IL doit rester ferme

[Stephen Liu]

Hi adel,


Thanks for your advice.

Whether add 2 "il" in one sentence?


B.R.
SL

[Frank]

Mmm... "Il" doesn't make any sense in this phrase, it doesn't refer to anything.

[Frank]

Hi Stephen,

A literal translation wouldn't really sound natural. Here's how it could be rephrased:

Merci de respecter le calme et l'esprit du lieu pendant les services religieux.

"le calme et l'esprit du lieu" is the common way to describe the solemnity of a church.
Merci de + infinitive is a formal imperative form, often used on signs and notice boards.

[adel]

Hi Frank

would l esprit have a capital e as in the Spirit in english.

[Frank]

Hi Adel,

There's no capital for esprit in French. However, there's one for Dieu, except when you're talking about other gods (usually using the plural form).

[adel]

Hi Frank

I got this from french dictionary
Compound Forms/Formes composées
et l'Esprit saint and the Holy Ghost
l'Esprit nm the Spirit
l'Esprit de Dieu the Spirit of God
l'Esprit de vérité the Spirit of Truth
le Saint-Esprit the Holy Ghost
le Saint-Esprit the Holy Spirit
saint-Esprit nm Holy Spirit
saint-Esprit nm Holy Ghost

[Frank]

The "Saint-Esprit" is the Holy Spirit.

Here, "esprit" really means "spirit", like consciousness, attitude.

[Stephen Liu]

Hi Frank,


Thanks for your advice.

But I use the sentence on internal communication of church counsels NOT as a notice. Your suggestion somewhat deviates from the essence of my sentence. There is a debate amongst counsels whether children under age 4 should not be allowed in the church during service.

Further advice would be appreciated. Thanks in advance


B.R.
Stephen L

[Frank]

Hello Stephen,

You can really use this sentence on internal communication. It's a bit formal I think it would be perfectly correct in this context.