Can I say this?

[Dan]

 

Hi, My girlfriend kick name is Jolie.  My question is, can I write this message in a Valentine gift?  It is an iPad and it only takes 35 characters per line and only 2 lines.   Can someone tell me if it is correct or if it makes sence?    Thanks

 

Ma petite jolie. Je t'aime beaucoup
si tu partager ce jouet avec moi!!!

 

[Erwan]

There's a mistake in the second line : Veux-tu partager ce jouet avec moi!!

[Dan]

 

But I want to say "if you share this toy with me" on the second line.  Could it be?

Si vous partagez ce jouet avec moi!

[Erwan]

Would you say "I'll like you very much if you share this toy with me" ?

If it's the case then say :

Ma petite Jolie. Je t'aimerai beaucoup           (to many characters, you can write bcp instead of beaucoup)

si tu partageais ce jouet avec moi

 

[Dan]

merci beaucoup....

[Dan]

actually what I really want to say is:

 

My little Jolie. I love you very much...
if you share this toy with me!

[Erwan]

I propose you :
Ma petite Jolie. Je t'aime beaucoup...

Et si tu partageais ce jouet avec moi!

 

But it's a bit too long.

An other way to express your idea could be : Tu me le prêteras, hein?

Which means : you will lend me it, don't you?