Translation of a short phrase

[Emma Willoughby]

Hello,

Could anyone please tell me if my translation of the following English sentence into French is incorrect or unnatural sounding? It's spoken by a young person, in an informal setting.

"I wanted it in pink, but Florence said it would clash with my hair."

"Je voulais en rose, mais Florence dit que ce serait en contradiction avec mes cheveux."

Many thanks!

[George Hunt]

Well I am not really qualified as I haven't come across that circumstance in French but my guess would be that "serait en contradiction " might not be correct  or as you say a bit unnatural (but just because I have not come across it doesn't mean it might not be right ).

However I think you can use "se marrier"  to say that colours go together so  perhaps that would be safer.

So ,maybe 

"Je (le) voulais en rose, mais Florence a dit que cela se marrierait mal avec (la couleur de) mes cheveux."

[Vedas]

hello,

 marierait is a good option, maybe  too mild depending on the intention of the utterer...

(but with just  one  "r" contrary to the English "to marry")

"I wanted it in pink, but Florence said it would clash with my hair."

other possibilities: jurer/ détonner

"Je le/la/voulais en rose, mais Florence a dit que cela/ jurerait/ détonnerait avec mes cheveux."

or allait jurer/ détonner avec ...

[Emma Willoughby]

Thanks, George - I am not necessarily after an exact translation word-for-word, just something with the same basic meaning. Instead of 'would clash with' it could be 'wouldn't match', 'wouldn't go with', etc. I was trying to keep the phrase as short as possible, can you think of any other ways of phrasing it that don't have quite so many words in as your amended version above?

Thanks so much!

[Davenne Marc]

Je le voulais en rose mais Florence a dit que ça n'irait pas avec mes cheveux

[Richard Last]

Je le voulais en rose, mais Florence me disait que ce seriait au travers avec mes cheveux.

[Davenne Marc]

Funny but not French

[Richard Last]

Française.